Replacing discouraged phrases with stronger alternatives isn't just about avoiding penalties; it's about developing more precise, evidence-based writing.
Key Principles for Alternatives
- Be specific: Replace general references with precise time periods, places, and groups
- Cite evidence: Replace unsupported assertions with specific research or data
- Use measured language: Replace absolutist terms with appropriate qualifiers
- Maintain academic tone: Replace subjective language with evidence-based observations
- Acknowledge complexity: Replace oversimplifications with nuanced analysis
Before and After Examples
Example 1:
Before: "Since the dawn of time, mankind has been fascinated with the stars. It is widely known that ancient civilizations used stars for navigation."
After: "Archaeological evidence from Mesopotamian civilizations dating to approximately 3000 BCE indicates human interest in celestial objects (Jones, 2018). Multiple ancient societies, including the Polynesians, Vikings, and Arabs, developed sophisticated navigation systems based on stellar observation (Smith, 2020)."
Example 2:
Before: "In today's society, social media has a huge impact on teenagers. I personally believe that this is causing a mental health crisis."
After: "In the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2023, social media usage among 13-18 year-olds increased by 45% (Roberts, 2023). This coincides with a 32% rise in reported anxiety and depression in the same demographic (National Health Service, 2024), suggesting a potential relationship between these trends."
Finding the Right Alternative
When replacing a discouraged phrase, ask yourself these questions:
- What specific time period, location, or group am I referring to?
- What evidence supports this claim, and who provided it?
- What is the appropriate level of certainty for this conclusion?
- How can I frame this point in terms of evidence rather than opinion?
- What specific details can replace vague descriptions?
Top Tip from Lecturers
Before submitting your work, use your word processor's search function to find phrases like "I believe," "proves," "throughout history," "since the beginning," and "it is widely known." Replace these with more precise, evidence-based language, and you'll likely see an immediate improvement in your marks.